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Posted: Fri, 30/06/2017 19:36 (7 Years ago)
Or you could do something like a Psycho Mantis with GLaDOS and have her just SMASH THE FOURTH WALL INTO PIECES. But, that's just me :3
@all
Aw, thanks! I'm a little obsessed with the second idea myself, soo...
Credit to Viper
Posted: Fri, 30/06/2017 19:37 (7 Years ago)
I really like that idea! Maybe GLaDOS can use that to her advantage somehow?? Like, she knows how people from outside the game world work, that they might as well be programmed themselves?
Posted: Fri, 30/06/2017 19:39 (7 Years ago)
I like the ideas, especially the LOZ one, though the second one is cool too :3
@Drago
I really love your story! I rarely ever mess up tenses, so I can't related to you or Lucky :')
@FF2
It seems slightly overused, yes, but don't worry! There's plenty of chances to put in other plot twists, like adding in another person from the outside that shouldn't be there either, maybe? That plot twist is pretty cool too, though.
@Mal
Accepted! Welcome to the club!
@Everyone
Sorry for being gone for a while, I was buildng a circuit and connecting it to my robot. Here's a bit of the story me and Keira are writing, I'd love any feedback on it, and every piece of feedbac will be sent to the story's co-author!
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I faintly wonder if I'd be able to get Keir to try and conjure fire from my mind, but I doubt it. He hates using his power, especially out in the open like this, where there's always a possibility of being spotted.
Speaking of which, where is that stuffed bear when we need him? He was supposed to be here, to lead us to a place on the snowy peak where we could talk in private, but there's nothing but ice and rocks.
"I'm going to gut that bear next time I see him." Keir mutters to himself, picked up by my advanced hearing. I roll my eyes, but I can't help but feel the same. Just as I'm about to suggest going for a coffee and ditching this meeting, a shape appears as a fuzzy outline in the distance, moving towards us. I almost smile as I can faintly see the reddish-brown color. The stuffed bear. Finally.
Posted: Fri, 30/06/2017 19:48 (7 Years ago)
Sounds good! There's only one thing that might need to be changed up that I noticed.
You said that Keir doesn't like using his power in the open, but since the two characters are seemingly in the middle of nowhere in a snowstorm, I don't think that's a plausible reason for him to not use his power. How about something like, 'the flame probably wouldn't even survive in this wind, anyways.' Other than that, it sounds really interesting so far!
Posted: Fri, 30/06/2017 19:54 (7 Years ago)
Good point :0
I think it stayed like that because originally we had another character there with them, and the other lines around it got changed, but we managed to miss that one.
Thanks for the feedback, Keira's already fixing it.
Posted: Fri, 30/06/2017 20:03 (7 Years ago)
Drago beat me to the punch on that one xD
The only thing I could think of is how could you gut a stuffed bear? I mean... It's stuffed, unless he means to rip out the stuffing. Other than that, I like it!!
Credit to Viper
Posted: Fri, 30/06/2017 20:11 (7 Years ago)
Yeah, Keir meant ripping out the stuffing.
Though, honestly, while Keir is smart, he's definitely not when he's angry, so I kinda always write whatever threat comes to my mind first because that's usually how instinctive Keir is.
Keira also pointed that out and then I pointed out how a stuffed bear couldn't be gay and she kinda went silent.
Posted: Fri, 30/06/2017 20:14 (7 Years ago)
Posted: Fri, 30/06/2017 23:30 (7 Years ago)
The story can be found here:
Pokemon Story
Posted: Fri, 30/06/2017 23:47 (7 Years ago)
lysol
Nickname?:
you can just simply call me lysol or lyss!
Favorite Genre Of Writing?:
Fantasy and horror!
Other:
i'm ocurrently working on my own history with my Oc's! It's still a WIP but i'd like to share the idea of the plot and the characters with their backstories! i allow criticism! Sorry if my english is bad ;u; i still working on that-
Posted: Fri, 30/06/2017 23:59 (7 Years ago)
Thanks for all the feedback on my collab story, Keira is very happy to get so much support, and it's really good for her since she's a budding author and needs some support (even though she's an amazing writer so far, even better than me (not that that's hard since I'm trash :'>)).
Also, I feel really happy with the newest chapter of AWNROP :3
Posted: Sat, 01/07/2017 00:24 (7 Years ago)
Nickname?: Jay or Trash. I prefer Trash, though.
Favorite Genre Of Writing?: Fantasy! Or types of nonfiction.
Other:
You take me down, you build me up
Believer
Believer
P a i n
Let the bullets fly, oh let them rain,
you take me down, you build me up
-Believer by Imagine Dragons
Posted: Sat, 01/07/2017 10:11 (7 Years ago)
Posted: Sat, 01/07/2017 10:32 (7 Years ago)
Also, anyone have stories they know? I wish to write a libary.
You take me down, you build me up
Believer
Believer
P a i n
Let the bullets fly, oh let them rain,
you take me down, you build me up
-Believer by Imagine Dragons
Posted: Sat, 01/07/2017 10:42 (7 Years ago)
Although, I do have a problem and I figure I should probably ask my writer friends about it--
Do you think I'm too descriptive?
I was reading some of my writing and I find that, in parts with less action, there's a lot of description, and I'm kind of wondering if maybe I'm a little too overboard with it? Since most of you here have read pieces of my writing/whole stories, what do you think? Keira (my collab partner) says I don't, but I just want to get other opinions.
Posted: Sat, 01/07/2017 10:52 (7 Years ago)
You take me down, you build me up
Believer
Believer
P a i n
Let the bullets fly, oh let them rain,
you take me down, you build me up
-Believer by Imagine Dragons
Posted: Sat, 01/07/2017 10:55 (7 Years ago)
(Ex. Tolkien)
[visit me]
-toyhou.se-
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Posted: Sat, 01/07/2017 15:58 (7 Years ago)
yeah, as long as you're not A) padding the story with descriptions that don't forward the plot, B) dragging the story down with over-exposition, or C) being repetitive with how you describe things, you're probably in the clear.
like a pretty good example of whoa too much description would be this one book where the author takes two pages to describe someone dropping a tray of tea - yes, it's strangely really important to the plot, but the author could have easily taken the subtle route instead. sometimes it's better to be spartan; it just depends on the pace and atmosphere of your story, etc.
Posted: Sat, 01/07/2017 16:58 (7 Years ago)
Nickname?: Skar
Favorite Genre Of Writing?: *coughs* Romance and Drama, I guess. Pffft--
Other: I actually don't have much time and energy to write, but I hope I get inspiration from this group to start writing again! First got experiences of writing from RPs and fanfics (which I realized were extremely terrible), then I took a year and a half of writing classes. uwu
i only think i'm cool but i'm not
Posted: Sat, 01/07/2017 17:07 (7 Years ago)
Oh, and Skar is accepted! Welcome to the club!