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judaiandjohan
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Posted: Sat, 15/08/2015 19:59 (9 Years ago)
While I was watching Lullaby for a Princess I think I finally came up with an idea for my character's backstory. Anyone willing to hear and critique on it?
Hi, I'm a huge anime and love the Yugioh series and Persona series and obviously Pokemon. Proud owner of the third on site Shiny Braviary
This is my lovely Persona Shiranui
SissyFox
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Posted: Sat, 15/08/2015 20:02 (9 Years ago)
judaiandjohan
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Posted: Sat, 15/08/2015 20:10 (9 Years ago)
Well, at first I was going to have Luna fall in love with an alicorn from another dimension, but part of me knew it wasn't a good idea. So while watching Lullaby for a Princess I saw the part where Celestial was tucking her in, and thought, what if she still had a physical form, like she lived on the moon. Then I remembered that they said in the show that the Stars aided in her escape. I thought, what if some stars were actually other alicorns, but they can't get to earth cause they're in space. What if one of the stars fell in love with Luna and they had a foal. This would eventually be the same alicorn that helped her escape from the moon. I still don't have an idea on how he's going to get to Equestria though
Hi, I'm a huge anime and love the Yugioh series and Persona series and obviously Pokemon. Proud owner of the third on site Shiny Braviary
This is my lovely Persona Shiranui
SissyFox
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Posted: Sat, 15/08/2015 20:46 (9 Years ago)
Ok bad signs:

1. It's an Alicorn, which is usually automatically OP

2. Having romantic relationships with any of the main characters is OP, especially a Princess (which happens a lot)

3. Having a foal? Where did the foal go once Luna returned to Equestria?

Good sign:

I like how you made it originate from the legend, clever and original
judaiandjohan
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Posted: Sat, 15/08/2015 20:59 (9 Years ago)
I had planned on him returning to Equestria before Luna did. Like I said, I'm unsure on how it's going to happen. I had wanted him to be related to Luna due to his power. He's going to control the currents of water, like low tide and high tide. In our world it's controlled by the moon so I thought it would make sense that he was related to Luna, the moon. Also, I made him an alicorn since controlling the currents seems like something only an alicorn would be able to do.
Hi, I'm a huge anime and love the Yugioh series and Persona series and obviously Pokemon. Proud owner of the third on site Shiny Braviary
This is my lovely Persona Shiranui
SissyFox
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Posted: Sat, 15/08/2015 21:00 (9 Years ago)
Do you own any normal pony oc's?
judaiandjohan
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Posted: Sat, 15/08/2015 21:10 (9 Years ago)
No, he's my only OC
Hi, I'm a huge anime and love the Yugioh series and Persona series and obviously Pokemon. Proud owner of the third on site Shiny Braviary
This is my lovely Persona Shiranui
MemeQueen
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Posted: Sat, 15/08/2015 21:40 (9 Years ago)
//yells from the distance//







That's a huge Mary sueeeeee
judaiandjohan
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Posted: Sat, 15/08/2015 21:48 (9 Years ago)
Could you give me some tips to make him less Mary Sue? Actually I think for a guy it's Marty Stu
Hi, I'm a huge anime and love the Yugioh series and Persona series and obviously Pokemon. Proud owner of the third on site Shiny Braviary
This is my lovely Persona Shiranui
mysteriousness
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Posted: Mon, 17/08/2015 12:33 (9 Years ago)
(I'm not too good at making a personality)
Okie, just for a random fact, the moon has something to with volcanic eruptions (Plate separating etc. etc.)
Anyways, inheritance of some of Luna and the stars (its unknown who the star is so I'll mixes traits that match an ocean) traits is the fairest thing to do. But since its your OC, you can add/delete what I'm about to list:
OC personality

relaxed
flexible
angered easily if provoked
unable to forgive himself easily for making a huge mistake
can be socially awkward at times
merciful (doesn't seek revenge)
hates asking for help even as a filly
stubborn
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alicorn power weakens due to mental pressure or prolonged use<<<this is just to avoid OP, and it happens in the show too, so I think it evens out



I think these are ok, but feel free to take away or add traits.


judaiandjohan
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Posted: Mon, 17/08/2015 12:43 (9 Years ago)
Thanks, I had a few of those down but some were definetly new. Another thing I wanted to add was that he's not one to quickly trust others, but if one can gain his trust and his friendship, he is loyal and would do anything to help those he cares about, and if anyone hurts those he considers friends he could be very aggressive. I don't know if that's considered Mary Sue though.
Hi, I'm a huge anime and love the Yugioh series and Persona series and obviously Pokemon. Proud owner of the third on site Shiny Braviary
This is my lovely Persona Shiranui
GreyTheUndeadPoochyena
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Posted: Mon, 17/08/2015 13:38 (9 Years ago)
Okay, maybe you guys can help me with my older oc, Anna Books. She's an alicorn too, and she was born a unicorn. She gained alicorn-ship through her wide knowledge of wisdom, and kindness. Help?
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Posted: Mon, 17/08/2015 15:01 (9 Years ago)
I'll help out, but first I found out about a book about Twilight Sparkle (the irony).
It reveals Princess Candance's past. If you're interested, read on. (if you're unsure, the author is G.M. Berrow, and she wrote an episode of MLP, which I think makes it a pretty reliable source)
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Princess Candace's Backstory
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Princess Candance used to be an orphaned pegasus raised by Earth Ponies. Apparently, the Earth Ponies have an rival that is an evil Enchantress called Prismia (*cough* Pinkie Pie's song *cough*) which Candance defeated. Upon doing so, she earned her Alicornhood and enters Celestia's Plane.
(aka the place where Twilight went to be a princess) Afterwards, Celestia trains Candence after seeing her potential.
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Anna Books' Personality
(This one was a bit harder because it reminds me of Twilight Sparkle so sorry if it sounds familiar)
Smart
Kind
Analytic
Can be torn apart easily (say two friends were arguing, if she were to decide on one she would have a bit of hard time)
Organized
One step ahead of the opponent
Weak to the loss of friends|family
Dislikes when things go wrong (she keeps in her head though)
Not way too sporty

This was a bit harder, so I'm open to critque. c:



GreyTheUndeadPoochyena
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Posted: Mon, 17/08/2015 16:21 (9 Years ago)
Well... If i were an actual pony I'd want to be Rainbow Dash, but I'd actually be Twilight. Therefore those pretty much describe Anna perfectly! And for her to not be too OP, she can't use her magic if she feels bad, scared, or has a friendship problem.
MemeQueen
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Posted: Mon, 17/08/2015 17:44 (9 Years ago)
Hey everyone!
As most of you know, I am an artist.
I have a question for everyone
If I were to make simple bases for you guys to make your OCs on
Would you use them? I don't normally do these things because I fear of art theft. So I am trusting you all.
I already have one made so-
GreyTheUndeadPoochyena
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Posted: Mon, 17/08/2015 17:48 (9 Years ago)
I might use one... Might... And if I did I'm 100% certain that I would credit you for it, even if I used it on another site I'd link back to you on here.
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Posted: Mon, 17/08/2015 17:49 (9 Years ago)
&& I would. Probably, I really really can't do bases, But I probably would do it, and credit you.
MemeQueen
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Posted: Mon, 17/08/2015 17:50 (9 Years ago)
I do not want it linked anywhere else tho.
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Posted: Mon, 17/08/2015 17:54 (9 Years ago)
I would differently use it. besides, I always give credit to the rightful owner.

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Posted: Mon, 17/08/2015 18:04 (9 Years ago)
I've already saw your art and I love it! <3
But my drawing equivalent is
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My sun ^^; (Yes, I drew it)

I don't know what it'll look like if I drew on it. ^^;
(But yes, I will give credit.)