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Dead Corpse [CREEPYPASTA]
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Posted: Sat, 20/12/2014 13:19 (9 Years ago)
Ghosts are real, Don't believe it?
He seen a white girl crying blood.
''Why you're crying blood?'' He said.
The girl creepily screamed and disapeared.
''I did not expect this to happen'' He said.
A spider apeared which attacked the Man and he lost one of his eyes.
''Ouch!''
Everything he sees got blinder.
There was house he did go into it to see what's in.
Man walked down the stairs to basement.
There was door to basement.
He opened it and there was another.
He looked at it.
A speech he heard ''Who are you...?''
He looked at the girl who said it.
''I am human!'' Man said it.
The girl attacked the man and cut it's head off.
The human was dead.
She hanged herself.
And wasn't seen again...
This is my second creepypasta and please say if it's good or bad.
Posted: Sat, 20/12/2014 13:29 (9 Years ago)
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Posted: Sat, 20/12/2014 13:31 (9 Years ago)
It's okay I guess.I give it an 8/10
Now, I'd say that's a task well taken care of! Uh… were you expecting something more?
Posted: Sun, 21/12/2014 22:13 (9 Years ago)
It's not really creepy as much as completely random
Try to add more detail, emotion, and suspence
I honestly would rate it a 6/10
Better then some I've seen, but it's no masterpiece
Keep working on it :3
Posted: Mon, 02/03/2015 19:46 (9 Years ago)