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Haunted Souls - Broken Echoes

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SandeviRae
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Posted: Fri, 01/08/2014 07:02 (9 Years ago)
Aris walked through the empty halls, listening to the echoes of her own footsteps. The dark painting on the wall stared down at her, the cold eyes of her dead mother boring into her heart. She walked to her father's study, opening the door. She stepped over the bloodstains on the carpet, kneeling by her dead father's side, tears pooling on his torn vest. "Why did you do this... Why would you leave me all alone... You promised..."



As the music box played and Aris's mother braided her hair, Aris glanced out the window at some doves in a nest beside her window, the sun shining in her eyes. The baby doves were jumping out of the nest, trying to fly, while ravens started landing on the branches of a nearby tree. "Mummy, why do the birds jump out of the nest?" "That is how they learn to fly, dear. It roots out the weak, letting the strong survive." she said as one of the doves fell to the ground, the ravens swooping in for the helpless bird. Aris watched silently as the ravens devoured the dead chick.



Rose petals blew in the wind as the priest blessed her mother's body, Aris standing by her father. "She'll be fine" the doctor had said. "He lied, Daddy, and now Mummy is gone." Aris said to her father, tears dripping slowly down her face. "It's alright, Aris, I'll never leave you." He said, crouching down to hold her hands. "I promise."



"Daddy, why are you packing?" Aris stood in the entrance of her father's study, hugging her stuffed rabbit tight. "I need to go on a business trip. I'll have to leave you alone with the staff and-" "But you said you wouldn't! You said you wouldn't leave me! You lied! Liar!" She ran into the hall, her father running to the entrance of the study. "Aris! Wait! I-" he sighed and continued packing his work supplies.



"You're a dove, Daddy." said Aris to his corpse, stroking his hair the way he used to do with her. "Mommy told me about them. They jump out of the nest to fly. To root out the weak." She set her hand down, picking up a piece of his work paper that had fallen onto the ground, and folding it into a paper bird. "You weren't strong enough Daddy. Not strong enough. That is why you fell. I won't fall. I'm not a dove, like you and mommy." she crushed the paper bird. "I'm not like you. I'm a raven Daddy. That is why I didn't fall too."



Aris ran to her mother's bedside, bringing her rabbit with her. "Mummy, do you want to play with Mr. Sly with me?" Aris asked, holding up her stuffed rabbit. "I'm sorry dear, but I can't." Aris tilted her head. "Why can't you Mummy?" "Because Mummy is very sick, and she needs rest," said the doctor, coming from behind Aris, putting his hand on her shoulder. "But she'll be better in no time! Now go on and play." Aris was swept out of the room. "But it's no fun without Mummy..."



Aris ran to her room, ignoring her father's words. She slammed the door, causing her music box to crash on the ground, shattering. "It's just not fair! First Mummy's gone, and now Daddy's leaving!" She cried, curled up on her bed. "I just wish he wouldn't leave me..." "But there is a way," said a voice. "You could always make him stay..."



Aris walked through the empty halls, listening to the echoes of her own footsteps. The dark painting on the wall stared down at her, the cold eyes of her dead mother boring into her heart. She walked to her father's study, opening the door. She picked up the letter opener on her father's desk, walking calmly towards him. "Oh, Aris there you are I just wanted to... What are you doing with tha- No! Stop! Sto-" Her father yelled as she plunged the sharp tool into his chest repeatedly. She stepped over the bloodstains on the carpet, kneeling by her dead father's side, tears pooling on his torn vest. "Why did you make me do this... Why would you try to leave me all alone... You promised... And you Lied, so I had to MAKE you stay." Aris dried her tears on her sleeve. "I'm sorry for hurting you Daddy, but it was the only way" Aris said, picking up her bloodstained stuffed rabbit. "Mr. Sly told me so himself. Goodnight Daddy, I love you. See you tomorrow" She said as she walked out of the room, closing the door, as Mr. Sly's eyes glinted bright in the dark.



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Plot:
This story is made out of random fractures of plot. I will trust you to put the pieces together as you go.

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This story is currently Finished, so you are free to comment as you will

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Aris:
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This is what she looks like. Without the wings.

EverestEevey
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Posted: Fri, 01/08/2014 08:03 (9 Years ago)

Title: feedback

The is almost one creepy story o.0 nice...story..creating..stuff (if i were you i will not know how to make a story)
SandeviRae
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Posted: Fri, 01/08/2014 08:04 (9 Years ago)
Thx for the feedback!
LucarioLand
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Posted: Fri, 01/08/2014 10:45 (9 Years ago)

Title: Feedback!

THIS IS SO FREAKIN AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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SandeviRae
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Posted: Fri, 01/08/2014 10:45 (9 Years ago)
Muse
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Posted: Fri, 01/08/2014 10:46 (9 Years ago)
Wait, oh yeah, we can talk now. XD

Yes, it was wonderful! Loved every bit of it. XD
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Me with PH drama.

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Me when I see idiocy.

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Me when it's all over.
SandeviRae
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Posted: Fri, 01/08/2014 10:48 (9 Years ago)
Corebess
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Posted: Fri, 01/08/2014 11:08 (9 Years ago)
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that...
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FREEKIN AWESOME!
but also creepy
SandeviRae
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Posted: Fri, 01/08/2014 11:09 (9 Years ago)
Thx 4 the feedback!
Corebess
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Posted: Fri, 01/08/2014 11:13 (9 Years ago)
no problamo
SandeviRae
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Posted: Mon, 11/08/2014 03:42 (9 Years ago)
And If any body wants me to make another Haunted Souls, just ask! ^w^
TheFool
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Posted: Mon, 15/09/2014 23:56 (9 Years ago)
How old is that kid o.o .... Btw great job :3

SandeviRae
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Posted: Fri, 19/09/2014 12:41 (9 Years ago)
aww, thanks!
and yeah, she's somewhere between 7-10