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First off, your drawings are awesome and I'm SUPER jealous of your realistic style- I wish I could see more of them! (;D?)

Obviously I don't know all of your plans for this- as I'm not you and not everything about the story is listed (which is NOT expected. Stories are very intricate and you don't want to spoil something really juicy. Just wanted you and everyone else to understand ;D)

But, I am really digging how animalistic your Kacure are looking- I've got a special place in my heart for fishie people and your Asheviire and others like him have some cool designs. It makes me want to draw them real bad. I'm not sure if it's anywhere in your story- or in the description and I happened to miss it- but maybe they could have some kind of need to be in water? Like, if they're dry for too long they start to shrivel up (or maybe dehydrate quickly.) Like I said, I don't know if this would even fit into your story, just offering things I've done with my fishie people ^^

And oh my god you've started creating a language. This really brings the story to life for me, along with detailed maps and backstories on countries and everything. I'm a total nerd for world-creation as well as character-creation. But, it can be hard to create a language because that involves designing grammar and sentence structure and before you know it you're teaching Klingon. Just leaving what you have now (maybe some extra words if they're needed, of course) would be fine and add a great extra detail to your story. (Does the language have a name?)

I like the nerf on your berserkers- so they're not super OP. With the virus that slowly eats at them- that's really good and angsty- especially if they're trying to save someone they love or something and ends up hurting themselves past the point of medicinal healing. (I'd like to know how they got their powers?)

I think it'd be cool to have a lame Kacure. By lame I mean like their parts don't work. Like, maybe a avian Kacure that can't fly, or an aquatic one that's gills have stopped working- so they can never travel deep underwater. I'm really interested in characters like that who end up being important, despite not fitting in exactly with the rest of their peers.

I'd also be interested in a world map- if it's different from Earth as it is now. I love maps ouo

I'd like to learn more about the social structures as well- like who's in charge of who directly. Are their kings or presidents? Stuff like that.

(Haha, maybe a human group that fights for Kacure rights?) (Maybe it could be something that the majority of the Kacure hate, because it belittles them?)

I'm getting a fantasy/adventure feel from this and I'm digging it!~

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Alright, so, I'm not going to delve too deep into characters at this point because there are A LOT but I will try to get the basics of this story down.

The world isn't post apocalyptic, really. There's a big war going on north of the main country (main country = Centreal, war country = Rhetoria) and there are a lot of people fleeing it.

Centreans gotta big problem with immigrants

The cities in Centreal are organized into massive circles, and divided into five sections. 4 are residential, and the fifth- which is the center- is where all the shops and schools and everything that isn't lived-in goes.

There are no cars, people travel using The T (Subway, for longer distances) and a thing called The Belt (Which is like those long flat escalators you see in high-touristy areas and airports.) The Belt runs in front of houses like a street would, and is constantly moving.

Everyone in the beginning lives in Nazareth, and the Magical Boy team is about to start their freshman year at Nazareth Highschool C (Which is the lowest academic ranking of the 4 high schools in the city. Real good soccer team though.)

All's going well, until they wake up and find that there's this weird choker on their necks.

What the hell?

But they can't take it off, some freak out and others say "Whatev" and they head off to school.

Come to find out...

THEY'RE MAGICAL BOYS
Because that's not a little fruity

This story takes place on Earth- but with different continents. I just took Pangea and cut out some places. There's basically part of America, Russia, Mexico and then a little island I just made up.

Centreal - This place is the main setting. It's basically in control of EVERYTHING. It has 5 cities, all of which are walled (think like AoT kind of, but not that strict) because the government says the environment is too harsh for humans to be living so far apart. The capital, Nazareth, is where all of the main characters live.

Rhetoria - This country is north of Centreal and it's really snowy and recently became completely thrown into a massive civil war. Most Centreans HATE Rhetorians- as the Rhetorians are fleeing the war and coming to their country. There are a lot of laws against Rhetorians and everything it's really bleh.

OTHER TWO COMING LATER, THE ABOVE ARE MOST IMPORTANT

Randall Lincoln - This guy's an idiot. He speaks in the vernacular- and has a British/hick accent. he'll be easy to understand. He's not very smart, two grades behind his twin brother, and doesn't have much confidence in his brain. He's got a good heart though, and is best friends with Juan. He plays football (American kind)

Juan Ramirez - He's a really cute, overall nice guy. He's best friends with Randy and super awesome at soccer. Average student. He wants to grow up and join the Centreal Military and cool the war in Rhetoria so everyone can start getting along.

Viktor Orlov - This guy is Rhetorian born and raised. He left the country when he was five. His parents and his aunt and uncle dropped him and his three cousins off in an immigration center and they were separated. Viktor now lives with his cousins Ace, Alley, and Axis- all whom have health issues. They're given a certain amount of money from the government to buy necessities but it often isn't enough. Their house has a couch, and that's it. They each have one pair of clothes. Most of their money goes towards the medication. Viktor plans on returning to Rhetoria as soon as possible to try and fix whatever's going wrong.

Jinx Arestelle - He considers himself Viancellean (which is a part of Rhetoria that is trying to become unified. It's not recognized by Centreal) but he was born and raised in Centreal. He has 11 brothers and sisters, and they're still coming. Because of that he can roam around a lot and isn't being sought out by his parents. He's very free with his favors, and hops around from lady to lady. He's very good friends with Viktor, and taught him (Viktor) and his cousins Centrean when they moved. He's a photographer for the school paper, and also good friends with a star soccer player, Dean Smith.

Arkady Valeriev - He's really quiet and very much a wallflower. He's half Rhetorian and doesn't have to wear the identifying flag-pin (Rhetorians have to wear their flag to let everyone know they're Rhetorian.) He has a younger sister whom he loves, but has trouble getting close too. He doesn't have any friends other than Traitor- whom he also love. As in loves. Traitor doesn't get it though. He can act like a child, especially when he's upset. But he's very loyal, and VERY territorial.

Princeton "Traitor" McNash - This guy's a piece of work. His father works for the government and he gets away with whatever he wants. He's been arrested a bunch of times for petty theft and destruction of property- as well as drug possession. But, daddy always bails him out. He's spoiled- unless he's around his mother. He's easily the most attractive person around that anyone in Nazareth's ever seen- which doesn't help his elated purpose. He's good friend with Johnny, as well as Arkady. He's a water-sport person (+Baseball) and he dreams of one day seeing the ocean. He's got two brothers. Hunter, who is adopted and older than Traitor. Then Malachite, who is a product of one of his father's affairs with another woman. Yes, Traitor's parents are still together.

WILL BE UPDATED SOON ^W^

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