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Before we start pls Post if this was good or bad :)

One day there were 4 Kids who had Alot of happy lives they're names were Kane,Sam, Zane And Lily

The kids were very happy to have they're parent's
But.... The 4 kids parents died of the same killer but the killer is still unknown

Then one day Kane decides for revenge
He said"I will have my revenge on the killer...."
But for some reason the 3 thought he went insane then Zane asked him
"Are you insane?"

Then Kane for some reason tried to choke Zane

Kane's eyes were pitched black

Lily and Sam shouted "STOP!!!!
Then Kain came into his senses
saying "Huh? Where? What?"

Zane coughed out blood
*cough*
*cough*

Zane grabbed a knife and had pitched black eye's like Kain

Zane stabbed Kain

Zane said"HEHEHEHE....."

"I WAS THE MURDERER ALL ALONG......"

"AND YOU GUYS WERE TOO STUPID YO NOTICE"
"...NOW... DIE!"

Sam and Lily went on a run

Lily said"whats going on first Kain now Zane?"

Sam didn't reply

then Lily said"w-w-wait Your also the killer?Tell me!"

Sam said "y-y-yes i am too the killer.."

"I'm....sorry..... but you have to die
.."
Lily saying her last words
"I..... Loved you like a Brother"
Sam was shocked and Zane came

"DID YOU GET HER?"

Sam was angered

"Now you Die!"

Zane said"What are you talking abo-"

Sam threw a knife at his head

Then Sam hanged himself at his house

Kain was still alive but still he didn't do something to stop them all

"goodbye...."

Then he also hanged himself in the hospital

The insanity broke into they're minds thinking they were the killer

The fanfiction ends here
Pls say its good or bad c:

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Hmm...It's not that scary...

You should make it more suspense,and maybe add a little bit of some gore scenes like torture.

I'll give it a 5/10

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Great idea i should put that on my notes (of course c:)

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